Thursday, June 16, 2011

My first proposal - Short story



Tringg…Tringg.

" Hmmm again the miscall. What this girl up to?" The miss call was from Arshu. 

I had met her only a week ago in my cousin's marriage but in between this 7 days I have received a dozens of miscalls and calls from her. 

"Hmmm should I call her?" just when the thought flashed me the bell rang again. It was a long bell. "She is calling me indeed." I thought. 

"Hello, what’s up  madam ! Getting bored so early hours of the day".  Early! It was already 8, but for her it might be early. College holidays and no work , obviously anyone will get fed up.

"Am i disturbing u?" Usual dialogues of girls before asking some favour.

"Not really, then for a girl like you anyone will find time !" Why should I lose any opportunity to impress a girl.

It was just 7 days but within this time we had developed a strong relation. She has said in between that everyone told her that I am a hard nut to crack but she found me different. But I am still puzzled about what difference she found in me.  Her innocent talking and vibrant actions has attracted me too. 

"Then I want you to waste little more time for me. Can we meet up today? Need to talk to you personally".

 "Sure " 

Even without any surety what her intensions are, I told her sure.  Girls! They make boys dance to there tunes. We fixed up the time and place. It was the nearby place and I had ample time but I was rushing. 

"What for ? " that was all in my mind. I reached the place way before the fixed time. "Even for my interview I went late and here " I thought. 

She was punctual.  She reached there at the appointed time. She was looking great in the yellow suit and I confessed to her that. 

“Actually as per your Torres star you like yellow, so I chose this " 

In between these days she had been interrogating me like some cop. My birth date, star, my likes and dislikes . . . Everything. And I was answering to her like a parrot . 

"Make my word, You will make a good lawyer out of you.” that what I advised her. 

Then I asked her, " Now tell, why are we here?" with some hesitation she started and told how she fell for me and at last told she liked me. 

I was in seventh heaven but somehow showed nothing on my face. She was a bit bewailed and asked “is this a one side one?”

I don't know what to tell. May be my ego was not ready to surrender in front of a girl. But looking into her face, I couldn't control myself and burring all my egos nodded a smile. 

The next moment i saw her jumping and laughing aloud. Then after all her excitement came to a halt she looked into my eyes and said 

“Sorry bro! This was just a bet between me and Shilu ( my cousin ). She said you are a hard nut to crack and I said I could. This was all drama. I know it was cruel from my side but . . . " 

Before she could finish her explanation, I smiled and said “No problem”, and drove away from away from that place. I can't describe the expression in which I was. Just then when I tried to recall everything the phone rang again. It was her call. 

I smiled at myself at being a fool. Now when I write this, I am a caring husband and a loving dad of two beautiful angels. I still rewind to that time and say to me “What have i lost?”  Nothing except for a Sim card whereas I gained a week of flirting to remember. 

That’s life.

 I could have turned to some revenge or sobbed on being fool. But my action at that time gave me a life of peace. 

Life gives you all flavours; some sweet, some sour and some like this “spicy”, love to enjoy it. At last you have one life to live and live that it to remember.

3 comments:

  1. The title of the blog seems to keep the readers in bit of ambiguity of what it really means. Coming to the title of the story, it's not that catchy; may be you can make it a bit more refreshing to it. Whatever you had in mind has been conveyed to the reader with clarity, yet there appears to be lag in the flow of words. The lag is because of the short and small sentences used.

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  2. As far as grammar is concerned, dude you must keep your Wren and Martin grammar book with you. I've found nearly 20-25 silly grammatical mistakes, which is not a good sign of a good technical writer. Improve on that aspect of your writing and keep your sentences with a word limit of 8-16. I do understand that while writing a short story of this kind you ought to keep this short and narrative. Since this is a blog you can your own style in it but there isn't a compromise for good english. So the conclusion, not an impressive start yet not disappointing. Keep up the good work dude. Now just check the way I write; there are major differences in your's and mine. Check and make the changes. . . Good work :)

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  3. In these comments that I've given there are some punctuation mistakes because of that fact that I didn't proofread.

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